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Here it is, Help plz with grammar and spelling and everything else plz. thxx My Family Divided My parents never really got along well and from an early age I figured at some point they would probably get divorced at some point in my life. My Siblings and I, including an older sister and two younger brothers, always expected for the marriage to come to an abrupt halt. When it finally happened, it was extremely random and done so casually by my father. My father works for a Canadian based company expanding into the United States. He meet her at the cooperate headquarters. I remember walking downstairs to my father telling my mother that he had meet someone else. As My Mother began to cry over the grim news, I began crying, my two brothers and my sister began to cry as well. Everyone but my father cried. Almost immediately my mother kicked him out of the house. That was, for a lack of better words, the beginning of the end. My father Decided he was leaving. We had to quickly throw the house up for sale; we couldn’t afford such luxuries as our upper class home with such a decline in income. We fortunately had better luck than most that summer selling our house. It sold within 2 months for close to what we were asking in price. We had to find a new place to live fast. We found a significantly smaller house a few neighborhoods over. The decrease in size matched the lower cost. We were fortunately able to attend the same schools as before, but our living experience would change drastically. We moved everything by ourselves on a borrowed trailer from my uncle. It took multiple trips but it was done. We had finally found a new home. The divorce had a big impact on me in more than just where I had to live. It almost took a metaphysical aura about it. I struggled to feel connected to either of my parents, let alone my friends. I would rarely see my father and when I did it would almost seem surreal. It’s really not a fun time only having one parent to rely on. You learn to rely on yourself. It makes you a stronger person. I’ve had to learn to be happier with less. My mom didn’t make nearly as much as my father did and was really struggling with debt from our previous house. I’ve came away with a lot of things from this divorce. I’m stronger willed, more independent, and unfortunately numb to a lot of emotions. It takes a lot to make me sad. I’ve mainly concluded that divorce is an awful as an idea and worse in practice. I’ll leave you with a quote the great band Blink-182, “If this is what he wants and this is what she wants then why is there so much pain?”

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2. My Family Divided My parents never really got along well and from an early age I figured at some point they would probably get divorced at some point in my life. My siblings and I, including an older sister and two younger brothers, always expected for the marriage to come to a halt. When it finally happened, it was extremely random and done so casually by my father. My father works for a Canadian based company expanding into the United States. He met her at the cooperate headquarters. I remember walking downstairs to my father telling my mother that he had meet someone else. As My Mother began to cry over the grim news, I began crying, my two brothers and my sister began to cry as well. Everyone but my father cried. Almost immediately my mother kicked him out of the house. That was, for a lack of better words, the beginning of the end. My father decided he was leaving. We had to quickly throw the house up for sale. We couldn’t afford such luxuries as our upper class home with such a decline in income. We fortunately had better luck than most that summer selling our house. It sold within 2 months for close to what we were asking in price. We had to find a new place to live fast. We found a significantly smaller house a few neighborhoods over. The decrease in size matched the lower cost. We were fortunately able to attend the same schools as before, but our living experience would change drastically. We moved everything by ourselves on a borrowed trailer from my uncle. It took multiple trips but it was done. We had finally found a new home. The divorce had a big impact on me in more than where I had to live. It almost took a metaphysical aura about it. I struggled to feel connected to either of my parents, let alone my friends. I would rarely see my father and when I did it would almost seem surreal. It’s really not a fun time only having one parent to rely on. You learn to rely on yourself. It makes you a stronger person. I’ve had to learn to be happier with less. My mom didn’t make nearly as much as my father did and was really struggling with debt from our previous house. I’ve came away with a lot of things from this divorce. I’m stronger willed, more independent, and unfortunately numb to a lot of emotions. It takes a lot to make me sad. I’ve mainly concluded that divorce is an awful as an idea and worse in practice. I’ll leave you with a quote the great band Blink-182, “If this is what he wants and this is what she wants then why is there so much pain?” Great Work! A bit of grammar correction but good. I reckon this is more than a recount or a narrative then an essay since it doesn't have any contention.
3. I think you need to do a rewrite. You have capitalization all over the place, run on sentences and paragraphs. I also think you need to reorganize the story. Sorry I can't give you more specifics, but there is a lot of work to be done on this paper.
4. My parents never really got along well and from an early age I figured [deleted repetition] they would probably get divorced at some point in my life. My Siblings and I, including an older sister and two younger brothers, always expected for the marriage to come to an abrupt halt. [But still,] when it finally happened, it [seemed] extremely random and done so casually by my father. My father works for a Canadian based company expanding into the United States. He [met] her at the cooperate headquarters. I remember walking downstairs to my father telling my mother that he had [met] someone else. As [my mother] began to cry over the grim news, I began crying [too], my two brothers and my sister began to cry as well. Everyone but my father cried. Almost immediately my mother kicked him out of the house. That was, for a lack of better words, the beginning of the end. My father [decided] he was leaving. We had to quickly throw the house up for sale; we couldn’t afford such luxuries as our upper class home with such a decline in income. We fortunately had better luck than most that summer selling our house. It sold within [two] months for close to what we were asking in price. We had to find a new place to live fast. We found a significantly smaller house a few neighborhoods over. The decrease in size matched the lower cost. We were fortunately able to attend the same schools as before, but our living experience [has changed] drastically. We moved everything by ourselves on a [trailer borrowed] from my uncle. It took multiple trips but it was done. We had finally found a new home. The divorce had a big impact on me in more than just where I had to live. [It almost took a metaphysical aura about it - that's a strange sentence]. I struggled to feel connected to either of my parents, let alone my friends. I would rarely see my father and when I did it would almost seem surreal. It [is] really not a fun time only having one parent to rely on. You learn to rely on yourself. It makes you a stronger person. I [have] had to learn to be [happy] with less. My mom didn’t make nearly as much as my father did and was really struggling with debt from our previous house. I [have] came away with a lot of things from this divorce. I [am] stronger willed, more independent, and unfortunately numb to a lot of emotions. It takes a lot to make me sad. I [have] mainly concluded that divorce is _awful as an idea and worse in practice. I [will] leave you with a quote the great band Blink-182, “If this is what he wants and this is what she wants then why is there so much pain?”
5. In your first sentence put a comma after "and" and "age" to set them off. siblings is not capitalized. you do not need to tell how many siblings as it's plural and denotes more than one. When talking about your father, lose the "so" capitalize "He" place an "and" between "States" and "He" . I remember I overheard my father telling my mother.....when mother began to cry, my siblings and I started also... my father did not. My father "had" decided not capitalized. We had to put the house up for sale as we could no longer afford it without my father's income. Lose "we" Fortunately, we were able to sell the house close to our asking price. Through multiple uses of my uncle's trailer, we were able to move into a smaller residence. place a comma after "yourself" then an "and" between "yourself" and "it". Take the first sentence of the last paragraph and add it before talking about your mother's income as it's still about your feelings. End with the quote. Hope that helps. Good Luck.